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  The Following is an excerpt from the 
  screenplay "Pathos Bill" by Mark W. 
  Gray.  Any unauthorized duplication 
  or distribution is strictly 
  prohibited.
  
  ©1998 Mark W. Gray
  WGA Registered 
  #686823
       
       
       

       INT TOPLESS BAR - NIGHT

       A BUXOM WOMAN in a Red, white, and blue G-string dances on 
       the runway to ZZ Top.  MEN are clustered around the runway 
       and at tables.  STRIPPERS in provocative outfits chat up the 
       clientele.  A WAITRESS takes away two empty beer pitchers and 
       puts down a third.  Cosmo, Bill, and BRUCE sit at a table 
       watching the show.  

                           BRUCE
                 Hey, wait a minute.  I thought they were 
                 supposed to be "totally nude".

                           BILL
                 No.  Here they're "Gorgeous ladies from 
                 around the world".  That other place 
                 where we didn't go was "Totally Nude".

                           BRUCE
                 Oh, right.

                           COSMO
                 This is better though.  At a totally nude 
                 place there's like, no showmanship at 
                 all.  They just roll around and point 
                 their goodies at you for dollar bills.  
                 This is much classier; like "Flashdance".  

                           BILL
                 But so what?  I mean, wouldn't your 
                 regular girlie show patron just go where 
                 ever the women were the most nude?  

                           COSMO
                 Some would.  But in Indiana, as in most 
                 states, a place with totally nude dancers 
                 can't serve alcohol.  And staring at some 
                 skanky snatch when you're stone cold 
                 sober can be unbearably depressing.

                           BRUCE
                 I see your point.

       An attractive busty young woman (TINA) wearing a string 
       bikini, pumps, and a mesh chemise, comes up to their table.

                           TINA
                 Good evening.  How are you fellas 
                 tonight?

                           BILL
                 Fine.

                           BRUCE
                 Great.

                           TINA
                 Great.  Would any of you gentlemen be 
                 interested in a table dance?

                           BRUCE
                 Uh... I don't think...

                           COSMO
                 How much is it?

                           TINA
                 A table dance is $20,  but a private 
                 dance in one of the alcoves is only $35.

                           COSMO
                     (pulling money from his wallet)
                 Well, our friend Bruce would like $20 
                 worth, please.  He's getting married on 
                 Saturday.

                           TINA
                 Maybe we can change his mind.

       Smiling, she takes the money and tucks it into her tiny 
       purse.  She turns Bruce's chair away from the table and 
       starts doing a provocative routine inches in front of him as    
       Bill and Cosmo watch.

                           COSMO
                 She's very talented.

                           BILL 
                 I agree.  Do you go to these places a 
                 lot?

                           COSMO
                 No, just the odd bachelor party, my own 
                 included; plus once or twice to get a 
                 buddy out of a funk.  I scouted a bunch 
                 for a movie I was working on; also the 
                 one we actually shot in.  Of course, when 
                 you're in Vegas you can't not go to one, 
                 so I've been to a couple there.  

                           BILL
                 That sounds like a lot.

                           COSMO
                 I guess so, huh.  But it's just 
                 entertainment;  all part of life's rich 
                 pageantry.  Besides, it's like Father 
                 Donovan used to say, "Pecca Fortitaire!"

                           BILL
                 I must have been absent that day.

                           COSMO
                 "Pecca Fortitaire!"  It means "Sin 
                 Bravely!"

                           BILL
                 Father Donovan said that?

                           COSMO
                 Yeah.  You know how the Jesuits are.  

       The stripper on stage finishes as the music fades out.  Tina 
       finishes Bruce's lap dance, touching him on the face.

                           TINA
                 You want another one, sugar?

                           BRUCE
                 No thanks.  Maybe later...

                           TINA
                 Bye bye now.

       She walks away; Bruce's eyes follow.

                           BRUCE
                 What a nice girl.

       A puff of smoke squirts out from under the curtain as the 
       lights change to a dramatic purple.

                           ANNOUNCER
                 Now get ready for a Gentlemen's Club 
                 favorite.  Are you feeling spooky?  
                     (Scary stage whisper)
                 The truth is out there...

       The music switches to an uncanny simulation of the X-files 
       theme.  A flashlight beam pokes out through the curtain, 
       followed by a SCULLY LOOKALIKE wearing a trench coat.  She 
       sneaks down the runway with her flashlight.  The audience is 
       awed.

                           COSMO
                 See?  Showmanship.

       She sluffs off the raincoat revealing an Armani-style suit 
       with a short skirt.  Her dance mimics behaviors from the X-
       Files as she drops piece after piece of the outfit. 

                           COSMO
                 So, man, what have you been up to?  How 
                 is the swinging singleness coming along?

                           BILL
                 Oh, it's alright.

                           COSMO
                 Yeah?

                           BILL
                 Yeah.  By that I mean it sucks.  It's not 
                 fair!  Dating, I mean.  You put yourself 
                 out there just asking for rejection.  And 
                 the man always has to be the pursuer.  A 
                 woman just doesn't come up to you in bar 
                 and start a conversation... Well, here 
                 they do 'cause they want to sell you a 
                 lap dance.  But in real life, you've got 
                 to be smooth, and good looking, and have 
                 a lot of money, and have clever things to 
                 say... It's a losing proposition.  

                           COSMO
                 Kind of a slow year, huh.

                           BILL
                 It's just bullshit.  I mean, why do we 
                 have to go through all that posing 
                 anyway.  And the constant rejection...

                           COSMO
                 You know, there are other places to meet 
                 women besides bars.

                           BILL
                 Yeah, but...  It all seems so futile.

                           COSMO
                 Don't you meet women at work?

                           BILL
                 Not really.  There was one girl I kind of 
                 liked.  We were supposed to go out once, 
                 but she kept having to reschedule it; 
                 over and over until finally I just said 
                 fuck it.

                           COSMO
                 But she might have had some legitimate 
                 time conflict.  You should ask her again.

                           BILL
                 I dunno.  I think she's dating somebody 
                 else at work now.

                           COSMO
                 See, you snooze, you lose.

                           BILL
                 Thanks, that's very sage advice.  I mean 
                 this always happens to me.  I end up 
                 calling and calling.  And they're always 
                 real nice and encouraging when I finally 
                 reach them, but do they call ever me?  
                 No.  After a while it just seems 
                 pathetic.

       As the dancer on stage begins to remove her white brassiere, 
       she moves forward on the stage, in character as if searching 
       with her flashlight.  

                           COSMO
                 Well, how did you meet Linda?

                           BILL
                 Um... She was working in a store and I 
                 was Christmas shopping.  We got talking 
                 about corkscrews or something.

                           COSMO
                 See?  Effortless.  Just quit putting out 
                 this cloud of desperation.  Granted, the 
                 thing with Linda didn't really work 
                 out...  

                           BILL
                 That's an understatement.

       The dancer's light drifts onto Cosmo and Bruce, then lands on 
       Bill.  A look of recognition registers on her face.  She 
       twirls and continues.  She pulls her gun from its shoulder 
       holster and points it around the room. 

       When the song suddenly ends with it's trademark beat, the 
       lighting changes putting the dancer in silhouette as she 
       strikes a final pose.  The crowd goes crazy, throwing wadded 
       dollars onto the stage.  She puts her trench coat around her 
       shoulders and graciously exits, collecting the money.

                           COSMO
                 Now, THAT'S entertainment.

                           ANNOUNCER
                 Allllright!  That was our very own very 
                 special agent.  She'll be back a little 
                 later.  

       At the back of the room we see the ANNOUNCER who also 
       dexterously operates the lighting board, spot light, and 
       sound system.

                           ANNOUNCER (cont'd)
                 We hope you're all having a great time 
                 tonight.  We've got a lot of lovely 
                 ladies waiting to entertain you.  
                 Remember, happy hour is three to five on 
                 week days, and every Saturday is Ladies' 
                 Night!  We know you have a choice when 
                 looking for quality adult entertainment, 
                 and we appreciate you choosing Route 421 
                 Gentlemen's club.

                           COSMO
                 I want his job.

                           ANNOUNCER
                 Now, fresh from the Champs Ellysee, 
                 Mesdames et Messieurs, Bienvenue: Sylvie!

       The lights change as SYLVIE, a nude woman with an accordion, 
       steps out and starts a soulful version of LA VIE EN ROSE.

                           BILL
                 There's something you don't see every 
                 day.

                           COSMO
                 So, Bruce, You having fun?

                           BRUCE
                 I can't believe I've lived here my whole 
                 life and I've never been to this place.  
                 I love you guys! 

       They drink.  From a curtained doorway next to the stage, MAJA 
       (the SCULLY LOOKALIKE) comes out.  She wears her Scully 
       lingerie with her trench coat around her shoulders.  She 
       moves through the room toward Bill's table, singling him out.

                           MAJA
                 Hi.

                           BILL
                 Hi.  I'm sorry, you were really great, 
                 but I don't think I need a table dance 
                 right now.

                           MAJA
                 You were in the painting class -- at the 
                 senior annex.

                           BILL
                 Yeah... 

                           MAJA
                 Do you remember me?

                           BILL
                 Uh... Were you in the class?

                           MAJA
                 I was the model.  

                           BILL
                 The model?

                           COSMO
                 Well, it's a small world after all.

                           MAJA
                 Oh, this isn't my hair.  It's is a wig, 
                 see?  I'm usually blond.

       She peels up a bit of the wig and shows her hair to Bill.

                           BILL
                 I see.

                           MAJA
                 I just wanted to tell you I really liked 
                 your painting.

                           BILL
                 Really?

                           MAJA
                 Yeah, it was the best one.  How come you 
                 never finished the class?

                           BILL
                 Well, I had a lot of things going on.  I 
                 just didn't have the time,  You know...

                           COSMO
                 So you're an art model as well as an 
                 Eckdesiast?

                           MAJA
                 Uh Huh.  I also do singing telegrams, 
                 though there's not much money in that 
                 anymore.

                           BILL
                 What's an Eckdesiast?

                           MAJA
                 Stripper.

                           BILL
                 Ah.  Of course... 

                           MAJA
                 Well, it's good seeing you... Bill, 
                 right?

                           BILL
                 That's right.  Uh...

                           MAJA
                 Maja (pronounced My-ah)

                           BILL
                 Maja.  This is Cosmo, and Bruce.

                           BRUCE
                 I'm getting married on Saturday.

                           MAJA
                 Congratulations.  Well, it's good to see 
                 you, but I gotta go...

                           COSMO
                 Why?  Take off your coat and stay a 
                 while.

                           MAJA
                 No, I'm not supposed to hang around out 
                 here; unless one of you guys want's a 
                 table dance...

       Cosmo goes for his wallet.

                           BILL
                 No.  Really, I don't think...

                           COSMO
                 Bill would like one.

                           BILL
                 No, no, Really...

                           COSMO
                     (producing a $20 bill)
                 C'mon, it's on me.

                           BILL
                 I said I don't want one, alright?

                           MAJA
                     (quietly to Bill)
                 You might as well, he's never going to 
                 let up. 

                           BILL
                 But...

                           MAJA
                     (whispering)
                 It's okay. 

       She takes Cosmo's money, drops her coat, and begins dancing 
       before Bill.

                           BILL
                     (uncomfortable, trying to 
                      maintain eye contact)
                 So, how long have you been working here?

                           MAJA
                 Since about March.  It's pretty nice 
                 compared to a lot of places.  

                           BILL
                 Ah. ... Do you still do the modeling 
                 thing?

                           MAJA
                 Uh huh.  A lot of people don't believe me 
                 when I say it, but modeling is actually 
                 much more physically taxing than dancing.

                           BILL
                 Really?

                           MAJA
                 Oh yeah.  Standing perfectly still for an 
                 hour--  You get into a bad position and 
                 you can really fatigue your muscles.

                           BILL
                 Hmmm.  But it's gotta be more, uh, more 
                 of a pleasant environment doing the art 
                 class, right?

                           MAJA
                 Yeah... Art classes rarely need bouncers.  
                 But the money, I mean, you can't make six 
                 figures working for art schools.

                           BILL
                 Six figures?  I mean, no I guess not.

                           MAJA
                 Well, that's if you work every night.  It 
                 still pays pretty good, though.  I'm 
                 saving up, trying to start a small 
                 business.

                           BILL
                 Wow.  Great.

       Maja continues dancing as Bill tries to maintain eye contact.  
       Eventually, LA VIE EN ROSE comes to an end, and the nude 
       accordionist starts an up tempo POLKA. Maja picks up her coat 
       and demurely puts it around her shoulders.  Cosmo and Bruce 
       applaud; Bill shoots them an "I'm gonna kill you fuckers!" 
       look.

                           MAJA
                 Well, thanks for the dance.

                           BILL
                 No, thank you.  I mean-- it was very 
                 good.

                           MAJA
                 You know, I'd love to see how your 
                 painting turned out.

                           BILL
                 Uh, well...

       She pulls a pen out of his shirt pocket and writes on a 
       napkin.

                           MAJA
                 Why don't you give me a call some time, 
                 and I'll come see it, OK?

                           BILL
                 OK, sure.

       Cosmo pulls out a couple of cigars, gives one to Bruce and 
       starts to light up.

                           MAJA
                 I'm sorry, you can't smoke those in here.  
                 It's a non-smoking club.

       She points to a sign on the wall which reads: THANK YOU FOR 
       NOT SMOKING, with a cartoon of a girl with huge breasts 
       smoking a cigar with a red NO sign through it.  

                           MAJA
                     (to Bill)
                 A girl's gotta have her standards.



©1998 Mark W. Gray WGA Registered #686823
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